Tittle: The wave
Once upon a time there were car’s driving to see the New York Statue of Liberty.
Then they saw it crash down, but they don't know what made it happen.
They said “O!, what happened here?!.
The people said angrily.
Then people started to get out of their car’s and gathered around the water.
Then they saw it crash down, but they don't know what made it happen.
They said “O!, what happened here?!.
The people said angrily.
Then people started to get out of their car’s and gathered around the water.
There were 54 (fifty-four) people hanging around at the beach.
They saw a huge wave coming from the water.
Then they could see bigger wave’s coming from behind the first wave.
A lot of rubbish that people left behind was going into the drain’s.
This went into the sea and the sea creatures ate it because they thought it was food.
All the water came out of the sea creature and made the wave’s bigger!
This was the biggest wave New York had seen!
They saw a huge wave coming from the water.
Then they could see bigger wave’s coming from behind the first wave.
A lot of rubbish that people left behind was going into the drain’s.
This went into the sea and the sea creatures ate it because they thought it was food.
All the water came out of the sea creature and made the wave’s bigger!
This was the biggest wave New York had seen!
Kia ora Mekhi. I love your story so much. I never thought that a wave like could hit New York. But i know it's not real. Do you think there will be one in NZ? Maybe next time you could say how much damage it made
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ReplyDeleteHello Mekhi, i liked you put the speak marks and making it scene maby you can add more detail's! olso i liked how you said 54 (fifty-pounds) with brackets. Olso there was a miss take on "O!, what happened here?!. Maby you can go back and edit that?.
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